Painful Love
by RavingMoonDoll Jan 4, 2015
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A scene plays out so cliche in form so lame in tone so boring. Pain swoops in restless and vengeful lusting for doubt in the hearts of the lovely loving lot who wonder exotic worlds erotic in nature hateful in time forgiving for nothing. Numb to a feeling so familiar that she longs to be touched in a way that very few have done. A hero lost in disarray and emotions crowded with past thoughts and new truths too strong to speak from tongues unworthy of such wisdom. How can something so pure be so dark and hot to the touch. A core hardened by time and many wrongful hands. Love can hurt as much as it heals. |
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8 years ago
by Mello193
That was strangely written. Perhaps put that into easier to read stanzas or even a comma to seperate ideas. Cleaning up punctuality. It seemed like a lot of raw emotion coming out, but I think that if you separated it into lines, each line would stand alone and compliment the after. Overall I really liked you word usage. You painted a nice picture.
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3 years ago
thank you!!
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