Comments : Just rocking my chair

  • 9 years ago

    by Sunshine

    :) the tone is lost between sad and indifferent here..

    The elements you chose, the bulb the moon and the squirrels, as if details that one would notice when in complete stillness state of mind, when one is in quietness and bunch of silent yet active thoughts.

    Your opening lines show that you are trying to find rest and a breath to take but as if you are not completely content. Feeling old like one who's been through a lot, the repetition if just to and fro in the poem and in the parallel closing lines shows that you are stressing on monotonous emotions that could be burdening.

    Simple yet thought provoking.

  • 9 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Downtime is seldom what it seems:
    "Still is still moving to me" - Willie Nelson
    Moving at a slower pace allows one to notice things otherwise missed. Like the squirrels, the moon, the breeze.
    Doesn't make you an old soul, but it does make you a calmer one.
    Here's to days in the rocking chair and other days running.