Love this one.Great work!

Hi,

Etheree's are a great form and you have nailed it.

Well done on a wonderful dark piece. Nice and gritty and fully of imagery. My favourite part is this: 'stealing dreams I've tucked underneath the carcass of hope...'

Excellent!

Take care,

Michael

I love the story line, the wording, it touches the reader and that is the essence of a great poem.
Technically tis verse is perfect. There is a typo:
"fore" should be for and I think centering the poem would give a more refined look to it...
Thank you for the read, enjoyed it!

Very nice write, thank you for sharing.