A really good piece here with some great lines littered throughout.
"I mistook a shelf life for a lifetime"
"....I missed the base note of bitterness...."
Two examples and I love the alliteration in that second one.
A sad poem ultimately. Too often we see - or want to see - much more in a partner than they are able to offer (or want to).
My only suggestion is "I stretched my hand far higher" or "I stretched my hand higher" as I think to write "I stretched my hand far more higher" is grammatically wrong. Just a suggestion and either way, this is a wonderful piece,
A sad poem Meme of lost love, when one thinks ones Love is being returned in the same committed way as you are giving it, but only later, one finds out that the Love you thought you were receiving back was shallow and something very different indeed with a 'goodbye' being said..
Heartbreaking I know.
A great write Meme. Loved the truth in your words.
Wonderful portrayal of lost love with some brilliant lines
You were a craving I never knew I had
I mistook a shelf life for a life time
the base note of bitterness
the likes of you came with a n expiration date. Really strong powerful imagery
2 years ago
This is absolutely stunning and speaks is much to me.
1: Sometimes all we can do is reach out and take our pick in love especially if we feel it so strongly from within us.
2: I really loved this because it shows that not only did you feel strongly for him but you could love coming from him too which is a really lovely thing.. Because you saw from him you were meant to be together.
3: Beautiful imagery of his words engulfing you.
Words mean so much but actions do speak louder.
4: Then here we have it, the turn in the relationship where things turn sour and go horribly downhill, which is the story of my life. Lol
5: This ending is so powerful. It hurts when we give our everything to be met with nothing.