Comments : A Woman of Worth

  • 4 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Kathy and welcome to the site.

    A great first write here about the lengths people - in this case, a woman - will go to stop themselves being hurt again. That really is the problem once this kind of hurt has been suffered, isn't it? How do we trust again?
    My only suggestion would be "can be the most sincere friend" or "can be the sincerest friend". I think to say "most sincerest" is technically wrong.
    Anyway, a great write, and all the best,
    Ben

  • 4 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Kathy,

    Welcome to the site
    Your poem touched me deeply.

    I had to nominate!

  • 4 years ago

    by BeautifulSoul

    This is a really good poem, too bad (sadly) it won't win. This site is way to biased. Good luck Though.

  • 4 years ago

    by Cindy

    ~~~ clapping

  • 4 years ago

    by Bob Shank

    Before too long she silenced she
    Closing his heart he selfishly let her be

    Started out really dynamic and had a great flow to it, the above killed the whole poem for me anyways, maybe you can do something with it, it just doesn't read right....Good luck, looking forward to reading more

  • 4 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    A much enjoyed read. It is a delight to see new people on this site who have such great potential. Loved the story with the poem. Pleasure to read. Look forward to reading more.

  • 4 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Wistful reflective serious yet sensuous
    Yet always alert
    She is a woman
    A woman of worth
    A woman alone

    I like this repetition you added in the middle and at the end as it reinforces the image/character of this woman. There is a richness in her character and at the same time a sadness which portrays her loneliness/pain.

    Before too long she silenced she
    Closing his heart he selfishly let her be

    ^^For some reason this line here disrupts the flow. Maybe you wanted "she" and "be" to be the ending rhyme but it has no flow. Perhaps removing the word "she" would help. Or maybe like this:

    Before too long she became silent
    He selfishly let her be closing her heart

    Otherwise all in all this read has a way to touch a woman's heart...well penned.