Comments : Left behind

  • 3 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Christy,

    A fast and frantic piece here that left me sweating! It reads like a fast-paced prose piece with a sprinkling of subtle rhyme which keeps it firmly in the "poem" category.
    A unique write that has a number of potential meanings, depending on who's reading perhaps.
    All the best and well done,
    Ben

  • 3 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Really enjoyed this faced paced poem, felt the emotions clearly

  • 3 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Christie,

    As Ben says, this is fast paced. I wonder if you played with the format whether it would the flow and the script would improve to allow the reader to follow the incredible pace intended. Just a thought.

    Well done, it reads well in any case.

    Take care,

    Michael

  • 3 years ago

    by Em

    I like what you did here.. Fast paced poem for the emotion needed to be felt and it worked well