Hello Christy,

A fast and frantic piece here that left me sweating! It reads like a fast-paced prose piece with a sprinkling of subtle rhyme which keeps it firmly in the "poem" category.
A unique write that has a number of potential meanings, depending on who's reading perhaps.
All the best and well done,
Ben

Really enjoyed this faced paced poem, felt the emotions clearly

Hello Christie,

As Ben says, this is fast paced. I wonder if you played with the format whether it would the flow and the script would improve to allow the reader to follow the incredible pace intended. Just a thought.

Well done, it reads well in any case.

Take care,

Michael

I like what you did here.. Fast paced poem for the emotion needed to be felt and it worked well