A fast and frantic piece here that left me sweating! It reads like a fast-paced prose piece with a sprinkling of subtle rhyme which keeps it firmly in the "poem" category.
A unique write that has a number of potential meanings, depending on who's reading perhaps.
All the best and well done,
As Ben says, this is fast paced. I wonder if you played with the format whether it would the flow and the script would improve to allow the reader to follow the incredible pace intended. Just a thought.
Well done, it reads well in any case.
3 years ago
I like what you did here.. Fast paced poem for the emotion needed to be felt and it worked well