Comments : Would You Ever Learn How to Divide?

  • 7 years ago

    by Saerelune

    Hey there, I'm back for a bit, so posting some of my old judge's comments, sorry for the delay!

    "This is certainly a kind of love letter/poem that is one of a kind. It's hard to include science within a poem without sounding too cheesy or technical, but I think Everlasting took a simple mathematics concept and turned it into a genuine and cute poem. Starting the poem with "Sweet heart" immediately makes the reader think that the poem is going to be a gentle one, yet the stanza that follows brings out the sharp tongue of the persona. It makes the reader ponder, in a good way. For, what does dividing has to do with the persona being a loner already, does dividing not result in even more loneliness? Thankfully a whole explanation is written in the following stanzas, but not in a tedious manner. It was remarkable how all the repetition of ones and twos did not bother me at all, then again the author is notorious for good repetition. I loved how, in-between all the maths, there are still cute snippets such as "But rumors whisper you are my half". I also love how the confusing wish of dividing reveals to be dividing problems and love and everything, it makes a negative word sound so much more positive now. I great twist for sure, it's a clever concept especially for a love-related poem. Well done."