Comments : Starlit Grief

  • 9 years ago

    by DarkLight

    Beautiful write. Sweet flow and message is touchy.

  • 9 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Cassie,

    Wonderfully written.

    I realise this is a sad write, but the bitter sweetness is hypnotic. 'The twisting turning galaxies ' is a great way to compare how much this loss means.

    Well done,

    Michael

    • 9 years ago

      by cassie hughes

      Thanks Michael. This was a very personal write so I'm glad it works.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Cassie,

    You have mixed your usual detailed writing with your usual effortless flow in this piece. Sad, but beautifully written.

    All the very best,
    Ben

    • 9 years ago

      by cassie hughes

      Thanks Ben.
      As I said to Michael this was a very personal write so I'm glad you liked it, I wasn't sure if it came over as too maudlin and trite.

  • 9 years ago

    by Em

    Hi Cassie,

    I see this is personal from your comments and I can tell as the emotion is raw and heartfelt. These kinds of writes always seem to be good as the reader can connect to them.
    Your rhyming scheme made the flow smooth.

    Em

    • 9 years ago

      by cassie hughes

      Thanks Em. I'm glad you felt you could connect to it.