Comments : Spring (Acrostic)

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Cassie.

    I do a fair few acrostics as I think they are challenging to keep tight but also to make them 'sophisticated'. People often regard them as 'simple' but that adds to the challenge: to make a 'simple' form respectable, it has to be really good. This is and it's a pleasure to read.

    Take care and all the best,
    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by cassie hughes

      Thanks Ben. I had forgotten how much of a challenge they are. Glad it worked. :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Cassie, lovely! I love the visuals and your descriptives of the promise of spring are just beautiful.

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Cassie,

    I love acrostics. Why, I hear you ask? Well Cassie, I am glad you asked, I shall explain.

    When I set to task myself to write an acrostic form. I don't tend to deliberate for long beforehand. Instead I allow the inspiration to come from my subconscious. I allow inspiration to come from the moment, the word and letters contained in front of me. I am interested how you approach them? Is it similar or do you deliberate on your theme?

    Anyway, I digress. The word Spring is synonymous with new life of all kinds, also new beginnings. Your poem is a lovely mix of both - the weak sunshine showing a glimmer of hope; just enough to make a flower bloom, such as a crocus or daffodil. To me this is like receiving half a smile from a lover or friend following an argument - does this mean we are on good terms now? Hope and new promises and possibilities are all around. I like the ending, the often 'rose tinted' memories we have of our histories - Wasn't it better when we were kids? The 'bitter parody' - exaggerated tongue in cheek of how wonderful times were, but actually were not.

    Cassie, you have packed a lot into just 5 letters. You have kept the form tight and the them interesting with the them of tentative new beginnings off the back of vague histories.

    Well done,

    Take care,

    Michael

    • 8 years ago

      by cassie hughes

      Thanks so much for the lovely comments Michael. I tend to write acrostics very much like all of my poetry. I sit and wait until the words come then let them flow as they will until they stop. Sometimes I have an idea of a theme before I start, sometimes I don't know what I am going to be writing about until I start. Once the words are out the edit begins and I begin to work out final line breaks and punctuation etc.
      Not all of my writing makes it, I bin the majority of what gets written but this just seems to work for me. Well. I think it does. Others may have a different opinion. ;)

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Cassie,

    What a beautiful piece. You have jam packed such a lot in so few lines which is good. I'd be struggling let me assure you. You use any good descriptive and your imagery is beautiful.

    'Sunshine weakly returns with
    promises of so much more to come'
    ^^
    These are my fave lines because you sun always tries to peak through during spring giving us that false hope and we know there are better things to come.
    Great work.

    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by cassie hughes

      Thanks so much Em. I'm glad you liked it. :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Cassie,

    What a beautiful piece. You have jam packed such a lot in so few lines which is good. I'd be struggling let me assure you. You use many good descriptive and your imagery is beautiful.

    'Sunshine weakly returns with
    promises of so much more to come'
    ^^
    These are my fave lines because you sun always tries to peak through during spring giving us that false hope and we know there are better things to come.
    Great work.

    Em