Too bad the rhyming scheme is not too evident and that the meter is off (even though the rules say the meter is not a must)... Otherwise, I would say excellent. A good read like always nonetheless.

P.s. Thank you for sharing. I had forgotten Amera came up with this sonnet form. I need to visit her profile. I wonder if she still has an account.

Double post

I have now added the full explanation of the Shadow Sonnet form as created by Amera M Andersen. She doesn't mention that it has to rhyme and, her examples don't. Also can you tell me where the syllable count is off because...for me each line has either 9 or 10 syllables?

By meter I don't mean syllable count, I meant the rhythm... It's not fully iambic (though I know it's stated in the rules that it's not required). It would be (in my opinion) excellent if the sonnet had had rhymes and on top of that written with fully iambic plus with great imagery. I know it's tough to accomplish that. That's just my geek self speaking. The sonnet is good.

Just to be clear, your sonnet is good. I liked it.

The reason why I mentioned what I would have considered to be an excellent shadow sonnet was probably better to have kept it to myself.

Now I'm only replying not to upset you but rather because a sonnet for the most part rhymes. There are plenty of variations of sonnets. And this form is called shadow sonnet. So anyone, who writes sonnets (or knows the rules strictly), would assume that the form would either rhyme. Even Amera rhymed her shadow sonnet (with the help of some slant rhyme). The other two poets didn't.

It'll be normal if you received more comments about that...

Tht doesnt mean you have to edit this poem. It's just information that can help for future poems.

Edit: I take the part about the other poets not rhyming back, the other poets did rhymed it as well.

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/shadowsonnet.html

Hello Hellon,

I do not know much about this type of sonnet. Having said that the footnote gave me sufficient information to know that this is a good technical poem and one that has a melancholy feel to it.

The other thing worthy of note, is that I will not be attempting one soon. I'll stick to Zombies! lol

All in all, an enjoyable poem.

Take care,

Michael

No Luce...you haven't up set me at all. Everyone is entitled to their own opinion.

BTW...example #2 doesn't rhyme.

I remember this old gem of yours, I can fully imagine a lady thinking/assuming/hoping... You made it almost visual.
Very adorable wording, sensations and format my dear.
Thank you for sharing :)

Hellon,

As always a great piece of poetry from you.
I didn't know much about this type so thanks for sharing the footnote and yours.

Great write, Em

Good well done