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  • 8 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Scott I like your poem, it needs a bit of tweaking with regards to punctuation and I think section 4 should be your instead of yourt. and tidbit should be titbit

    Maybe change hollow head to inner as hollow implies the reader has no brain lol.
    The rest is very good. I like very much the ending that its all part of the readers imagination.

    I find myself checking and double checking my poems even once they are published and still find I have the odd typo or punctuation out of place so it is quite common. All the best Milly xx