Comments : Sugar Lava

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a wonderful and descriptive piece of poetry. I found it to be almost surreal as I read it through, like sifting through a colourful haze of words, if that makes any sense at all.

    sunder each and every
    starry eyed parasite
    preying on reverie.

    ^^

    I love this, particularly 'preying on reverie'

    Great write,

    SL

  • 6 years ago

    by DirgeVenustas

    Great imagery, great use of words and rhymes but there were two stanzas that didn't work out too well. Either way this was by far one of the most unique as interesting poems I've read in a long time.

    • 6 years ago

      by Faithless Watermelon

      Any advice? I knew as I wrote this that things didn't quite fit together