...this is such a sad poem. Saying reluctant goodbyes are never easy. A torn heart is never the same again .

All the best.

Michael

Hello Gel,

as requested,

Suggestions:

* I love you and you know it's true
saying goodbye (so) hard to do
I think of it a thousand times
It makes my heart shamble for so many times...
^delete 'for'

* As I wrote this poem my heart cry (cried)
Even my tears they wont dry
Maybe I'll lost someone like you
And I don't know if you like it too(?)

* Thanks for the moment we shared
Remember, my heart is not full of hatred
^hatred doesn't rhyme with 'Shared' maybe use care?

I'm so happy in those days I'm with you
^delete the word 'I'm'
And I'm thankful for everything you do..

All the best,

Michael

This is a beautiful yet sad poem.
It's always difficult to say goodbye isn't it.

A few suggestions:

* I love you and you know it's true
saying goodbye (is) hard to do
I think of it a thousand times
It makes my heart shamble (crumble) many times...

* We have shared this special relationship
We survive(d) to those trials and hardship(s)
But now I don't know what will happen
As I see everything will end..
^^
^
I think in the second line you need to take out the 'to' and has happen and end don't rhyme and you've rhymed in couplets I think maybe the third line could be changed to something like 'now, I begin to break and bend'

* As I wrote this poem my heart cried
Even my tears they wont dry
Maybe I'll lost (lose) someone like you
And I don't know if you like it too..
^^
Maybe the fourth line could read..
'and I don't know what I should do'

* Thanks for the moment(s) we shared
Remember, my heart is not full of hatred
So happy in those (the) days I'm with you
And I'm thankful for everything you do..
^
Maybe the second line could read..
'remember, my heart will always care'

* Now as we parted our ways
Bear in mind that I have loved you in so many ways
Whenever you see birds flying in the sky
It's just me saying goodbye..

All in all great piece.
Em