This is beautiful, Thelma. You've painted a picture so that I can see the poem play out in my mind's eye.

Excellent poem.

A beautifully written piece. Darkness isn't always scary sometimes it can be magical.

Em

This really is a very good and detailed piece of writing, which draws the reader in and allows them to smell the garlic and turmeric!

Wonderful. Welcome to the site,

Ben

Wonderful write-your visuals are spot on, I felt like I was right there-well done-

I really hope this wins the weekly, so well deserved if it does

Congratulations!

Congratulations on your win! Well deserving front page write.

Congratulations on your win.

Very visual writing, congratulation

"I want us to be light and noise
and revolution"

^I absolutely adored these lines! Who needs to pay for electricity when you can stimulate it naturally.

I appreciated the simplicity of this piece, created such an in depth picture. Lovely indeed!

Judging Comment

This was a unique and fun formatted poem by Thelma!

I truly adore and admire unique poems and this piece grabbed me from start to finish!

This visual display was incredible, the eyes can see far more than words can express!

The ending is what really got me the most, to grab that powerful moment and make due with what you have and where you are at that very moment! Powerful poem!

Judging Comment:

An absolutely wonderfully written poem that rehashes the idea of love in a really unique way. I've often seen the theme of darkness be utilized to incorporate a sense of horror, this reverses that by using it as the context for love. It flows so naturally and paints a magnificent image of beauty in something ugly.

You
Can
Write

Love the sound of "garlic and turmeric". Also the way you utilised a break here:

"I want to use this
darkness and let you

feel my body in
undulation."

Is exquisite. My favourite part of the entire piece right there. Keep it up, lovely.