Mightily the Swan sings.

Well done.

Wayne, a very sombre piece with a personal feel to it that many people (including me) will be able to relate to.

Q1: What a powerful opening and one I can relate to because often I have wanted to sleep and forever especially when life throws so many bad obstacles in the way of me living to the fullest but I have said it often to carry on through bad times show how strong we are.

Q2: Wow, I really like this part especially the use of the word zest because the meaning I read to make sure is 'with great enthusiasm' and to find another word for that such as this one is fab as it keeps the rhythm flowing nice and smooth. It's hard to comprehend wanting to die and not doing it but still living in this bubble of self loathing and unable to stop it.

Q3: I felt like this when I woke up today, in fact I said to myself 'come on life throw at me what you will because I may not look ready but I am' and I think that's one of the only things we can do and remember it's a bad day, month or year not a bad life.

Q4: I like the use of creeping here because it shows how slow time goes when bad things keep happening and though those days go in a blur time seems to drag on forever then some. Also, my favourite line in this piece is 'laboring (I think there's a u missing in the word) with each breath because it shows the reader how tough life has been which is why this has been written. I feel using the swan is significant but I couldn't tell you why.

All in all a fantastic, emotional piece.
Em