Stained glass

by Twistedmind   Mar 17, 2017


I see a beautiful woman
Standing in rubble
Trying to give everything
To get out of trouble

One wall still stands
Trying to hide her pain,
She smiles through the window
Convincing herself she's still sane

It's hard for her to look in the mirror
She doesn't like what she sees,
A hopeless mess destine for failure
The reflection looks different to me

I see a beauty that runs deep
It's not just her hair or clothes,
It's behind those tantalizing eyes
Makeup or no

A beautiful mind
Like a abstract painting
She sees broken glass
I see the process of staining

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  • 7 years ago

    by Em

    Hey, this was really good, I liked the imagery and the rhyming throughout.

    1/ I like this opening as it sets the scene nicely of this woman trying as hard as she can to keep herself out of trouble and stop herself being hurt (I think) but being completely draw to it too.

    2/ I'm not entirely certain of the first line but it is what it is.. This woman has obviously been hurt in some way to have to mask her pain with painting on the most used mask; a smile and telling herself everything's okay.

    3/ I feel none of us like how we love in fact most of us will despise the way we look or some part of it at least though why I'm not sure and the imperfections we have will look completely different to everyone else, some will (like us) hate them but there will always be one person who falls in love with them.

    4/ Beautiful stanza.. We will all find this person we love no natter how they look because I think beauty is on the inside not outside.

    5/ I loved this!!! No words could explain why!!

    Em

    • 7 years ago

      by Twistedmind

      Thank you for taking your time to analyze and share how you felt about my poem. It means a lot.
      I'm really self conscious about my poems which I'm sure a lot of people are, but thank you I'm always looking to improve.

  • 7 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    I liked this poem which reflects the 'not so nice' aspects of our society very well. Good imagery in every word with great descriptive lines within it. 'She sees broken glass, I see the process of staining'
    Wish I had written that! Nice work Twistedmind.

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