Comments : Under Venus's Light

  • 3 years ago

    by Ren

    This is absolutely beautiful! Your rhyming is spot on and the imagery is truly wonderful to read! Fantastic job!

  • 3 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    I'm terrible at critiquing things I simply see things that make me go wow, sometimes sad and sometimes make me of see a new beauty in things.

    However! This seems like it's a torn emotion to me. It's almost bordering on forbidden fruit territory and what the heart desires yet refuses, or denies.

    I could be so so wrong and probably am but yet it has that undertone.

    Either way it's still bloody lovely.


    • 3 years ago

      by Mihir Deshmukh

      God Craig you couldn't have said it better, while writing it I had the internal conflict I go through everytime in my mind. It's about the times when I wish to do something I haven't done or probably shouldn't do and also the opportunities I lose out on due to it!