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I loved how you depicted the conflicting
sides of a person..
Check your first line
It has a double 'to'

Lvi

What a wonderful write...so descriptive & nice flow x

Craig, I liked this a lot. Your describing the part that went to war and the part that stayed home resonates a lot with me. Coming from a military family I understand the need to protect that part of yourself in order to come back to the world you call home and be able to put away that horrors you may have experienced in times of war. Well done Craig-

Another interesting title, nice job of pulling me in so completely. And very creative use of voice!

Thank you all for your comments. They are humbly received.

Most of the things I share kinda write themselves, they flow freely and are written very quickly.

Not the case with this one! The bones of it have been niggling in my head for ages but it just wouldn't find its voice. That it has now means I've a little more space up there.

Also that it's given a couple of you a couple of minutes pleasure, I find warming

Oh this is excellent!! Your rhyming is spot on and the flow is wonderful!

Awesome awesome awesome job, Craig!!

A great write, Craig. The ending just hit home.

Judging Comment:

This piece is interesting, the title is catchy and creative and the word choice was very well played with and utilized. The rhymes did not feel forced and the energy in this piece stayed strong throughout the entire thing (which was remarkable because it made me forget the length of this and how slightly off-putting that was at first.) A story was definitely told here, and not just that, it was also told extremely well, with lots of voice and heart. Absolutely nothing about this piece seemed unnecessary, or out of place, which was amazing. All in all, this was a great piece.

Again you totally threw me, you view things in a rather unique way. I would never have guessed

Craig