Craig, I liked this a lot. Your describing the part that went to war and the part that stayed home resonates a lot with me. Coming from a military family I understand the need to protect that part of yourself in order to come back to the world you call home and be able to put away that horrors you may have experienced in times of war. Well done Craig-
3 years ago
Another interesting title, nice job of pulling me in so completely. And very creative use of voice!
My you have been busy today, I find it interesting, and humbling when someone comments on something I've written especially when it's way back in the depths of my twaddle.
Glad you liked it and even more so that it perhaps meant something
3 years ago
This piece is interesting, the title is catchy and creative and the word choice was very well played with and utilized. The rhymes did not feel forced and the energy in this piece stayed strong throughout the entire thing (which was remarkable because it made me forget the length of this and how slightly off-putting that was at first.) A story was definitely told here, and not just that, it was also told extremely well, with lots of voice and heart. Absolutely nothing about this piece seemed unnecessary, or out of place, which was amazing. All in all, this was a great piece.