Comments : the year in which the yellow fishes drowned

  • 3 years ago

    by Brenda

    Sai, this is just lovely. Your visuals are so beautiful, it flows so smoothly. Well done-

    • 3 years ago

      by Sai

      Thank you, Brenda.

  • 3 years ago

    by hiraeth

    Is nightbook a reference to the same titled album by Einaudi? If not, well you should check it out, it’s really good, some of my favourites on that album are ‘the crane dance’, ‘nightbook’ and both the snow preludes. Sorry, on a tangent. Your use of imagery is superb, and this is testimonial to that; I conjured up images that were a mix between ‘starry night’ and ‘the great wave’, for the first stanza, and the latter stanzas reminded me of a supernovae. I don’t know how else I could best describe it lol.

    This is beautiful. :)

    • 3 years ago

      by Sai

      I'll be sure to listen to those. Also, I appreciate you saying that, as I could only hope to write something that's capable of evoking such magnificent images with words. Thank you.

  • 3 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the way you have penned this, the images
    the words you have chosen to bring out this picture
    and feeling is smooth and lovely...nicely penned :)

    • 3 years ago

      by Sai

      Thank you, Meena.

  • 3 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Congrats on your win, Sai! :-)

    • 3 years ago

      by Sai

      Thanks, Mel!

  • 3 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Congrats on the Win!

  • 3 years ago

    by Britt

    Judging comment: The power someone can have over us, with their words, with their heart, with their actions, is an all consuming thing sometimes, and I felt like this piece pulled those feelings right from my heart. I love the flow of this poem, it was original and pulled me in with every word. Awesome job!

    • 3 years ago

      by Sai

      Thank you, Britt!