Comments : You watch me drowning

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Powerful stuff, dark and very well written and rhymed.
    Just one edit: 'revealing in my pain' - should this be 'revelling'?
    Great write and all the best,
    Ben

  • 6 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    Stuck for words but nominated

    Craig

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    It's a powerful write. I felt your pain and defeat in each word. So well done-

  • 6 years ago

    by Em

    Extremely powerful write

  • 6 years ago

    by Lyical Madness

    Wow- totally blown away by everyone's comments, I feel very honoured <3
    Ben- thanks for noticing the typo- edited lol!

  • 6 years ago

    by Em

    JUDGES COMMENT: This is one of those writes that resonates with many of us where someone we love watches us drowning (I feel in misery) and either adds to the misery or just doesn't care if that makes sense. It's just so very powerful.