Comments : Only darkness knows the tale

  • 4 years ago

    by Jamie

    This is an excellent piece!

  • 4 years ago

    by Michael

    free verse,

    I read this on the thread and was going to comment when it had finished.
    This is a very interesting piece, with your perception of God. How you have written this is a deep thought provoking poem, which I enjoyed reading.

    One small query is:

    ' some whisper I am a ring' I just wondered why it was not written without mentioning 'am a ring'
    so ' some whisper I...

    whereas 'GOD' and 'LOVE you did this, and this is purely out of my interest. But anyway a great write my friend :)


    • 4 years ago

      by Ya----Na

      Thank you so much Michael.
      You are right it should be like as you said.

  • 4 years ago

    by Em

    Extremely thought provoking but very profound

  • 4 years ago

    by Brenda

    Free Verse, I loved this on Ben's contest and I love it now-well done-

  • 4 years ago

    by Mark

    Free Verse this is a unique piece and take on darkness. The inner acrostics are an integral part of this well written poem.
    'I am nothing, but just an experience'.

  • 4 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    A dark and twisty tale of the dark side of religion Shane ... love it! Thought provoking and uniquely structured. Well done x

  • 4 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Thought provoking, clever piece with much depth. Liked the acrobatic elements woven through out. Glad it's been nominated. Milly x

  • 4 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    This piece is wonderfully crafted and shows us so much of your unique and compelling writing. Great write.