Comments : Overturn

  • 6 years ago

    by Paul Hirst

    Mobile as peas on a child's plate
    Beautiful

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Some excellent writing here, not least the line Paul has highlighted.

    Well done and welcome to the site,

    Ben

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    I loved your desciptives! So much said in so few words. Well done and welcome to P &Q-

  • 6 years ago

    by Matt Carroll

    So much said in so few words. Well done.

  • 6 years ago

    by Em

    this might be short but this it is extremely powerful. welcome aboard

  • 6 years ago

    by BlueJay

    The opening line was incredible, it totally pulled me in and the word choice here was definitely powerful. Nicely done for such a simple write, you're really captured not only your emotions but something so overwhelming on the page.

    • 6 years ago

      by Hidden Eyes

      Thank you so much! I really appreciate it.

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    A striking piece, short but definitely impressed something. Congrats on the win!

  • 6 years ago

    by Mark

    Congratulations on the win!

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    Congratulations on your front page :)
    Michael

  • 6 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Congratulations! :-)
    =^.^=

  • 6 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Congrats on your ein

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Congratulations on your win! This really was awesome!

  • 6 years ago

    by Emily Wacker

    Congratulations on the win! Well-deserved!
    -Emily

  • 6 years ago

    by Purple Raven

    This really is an excellent write, Beautiful metaphors and imagery.

  • 6 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Judging comment:

    I am in lack of words to describe the beauty I see in this writing so I'll keep my words short just like your short and crisp poem.
    In very few words you gained the attention of your reader and delivered your thought and message precisely. Your description of emotions as mobile and undependable and following it, your usage of perfect similes is remarkable. An extremely beautiful write.