Kitty..at the moment (for me anyway) it just sounds very stilted..like a whole bunch of sentences
it has a price.
To get you must give
when only one invests
and the other only spends
then you'll always be in the red
paying with credit and overdrawn
love is the currency, tears are the debt.
I've always found shaped poetry fascinating. Shapes to play with. Words to shape and mold into mind images and visual art.
Your poem starts off with the word; Love. This sitting up the top of your word pyramid is symbolic to its importance, right? Like a previous comment, I like the currency metaphor. People say, "the best things in life are free", but that's not true, is it...