"Every week, this talented poet turns out sonnets for fun but, unfortunately in my opinion, they rarely get the recognition they deserve, on this site at least.
In honesty, this one doesn't always flow fluently, despite being written in pretty flawless iambic pentameter. The semi-colon in line eight, for instance, adds nothing there and only serves to disrupt the rhythm that iambic meter naturally provides. I also think that "And shine that glow to when I lived a child" could be altered somehow as it just seems a little forced, at least when worded like that. (note, I have no suggestion to offer!)
But that's the point: this form is incredibly hard and I think we often take their writing for granted. Above is nitpicking and only suggestion. Mark has written a moving and lovely sonnet (again) this week." (4)