Comments : Hi, I'm you're hot friend, the Sun!

  • 5 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    This poem is playful, and has a nice rhythm to it. There are two words that I don't feel fit in though,
    emotions in line 6 and representation in line 13.

    Haven't heard from you in a while, thought I'd pop in. :)

    • 5 years ago

      by CRAFTY KEN

      Hey! Good to hear from you! When I penned those two words, I had in mind when Jesus took his Disciple's up a high mountain, and was transfigured, and, he shown brighter than the Sun. Moses and Elijah (The Law & the Prophet), when the totally awe-struck Disciples saw this, they wanted to build Shrines for Moses and Elijah, but, a voice from Heaven spoke saying; This is my beloved Son, listen to him! Always appreciate your professional critique, missed you!

  • 5 years ago

    by Michael

    Really enjoyed this piece from you Ken, great write fella, M :)

    • 5 years ago

      by CRAFTY KEN

      Thanks so much Michael, I love writing those metaphors.