Hello, I like the 'family is important and a constant positive' message. Using the seasons as a similie, or at least showing how unpredictable seasons can be compared to the love of a great family.
There's a few typos, but with your edits I'm sure it'll turn out ok.
Nice job so far.

Any poem is helped with visuals. Your seasonal poem about family would work well on the screen. I'm sure you'd use family videos and photos. It would make a great Christmas gift to them.
Good luck.

I agree with Mr Darcy I can imagine this with a back drop of family images being a perfect gift. I also like the going through seasons and reiterating how wonderful it is despite the different seasons to be with family. Looking forward to seeing the finished product. Best wishes Milly x