And why would you put sunglasses on which only blunt all those wonderful visuals you clearly notice? Not sure if that's what you were getting at with the last line, but that's how I received it!
I do t know if your aim was for us readers to visualize how you were seeing when wearing sunglasses?
I couldn’t get that imagine. I don’t know what type of sunglasses you were wearing but it would have been cool if just by reading your descriptions, I could tell you you were wearing brown shade sunglasses or ... lol.
I do like the images created in each of the stanzas.
Oh and the flow of the poem. Your flow is getting better.
This is quite clever, STAR. There’s something childlike about the ‘I like’ repetition that I’m not sure about yet, but it feels like you started writing it with a different end product in mind but decided to improvise.
I find the inspiration behind this quite witty. I’m not sure I’ve seen a poem that criticises sunglasses before so I commend you for that! I feel you could’ve been a little more descriptive? I’m not suggesting you turn it into some overly verbose collection of adjectives, definitely not, but repetition of ‘brown’ and ‘yellow’ could be improved? The second stanza, stands out a bit for this reason too. ‘Brownish ugly dirt’ is a little clumsy for me.
sun bright burning my eyes.’
Should be ‘the bright golden sun burning my eyes’?
I agree with Lucero. Your flow is getting better! And I very much liked the idea behind this poem. :)