Comments : Self-absorbed

  • 1 week ago

    by Violet Raven

    Your poetry has been on fire lately. This is another one i absolutely loved because of the imagery and metaphors you used here. The first line is genius.

    Usually people use the word swirl to describe wind, but using the word wheel makes so much more sense. Because i can see the wind here making a circle pattern in the sky and diving towards this person or just the ground in general. So that feeling tells me it's a cold night.

    The rest of the poem flows beautifully and it makes complete sense to me personally. My perception is that this is person is taking life day by day and they are struggling doing so. The perspective here is through the eyes of someone trying to stay positive and showing what a good morning would look like.

    You mixed both sadness and happiness well here. I love this poem truly.

  • 1 week ago

    by hiraeth

    "Absorbed by the profound moment,
    I rise, like my prayers,
    in sadness and in stillness
    wondering, is this world even real?"