Comments : A Moment

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Daniel- Hello!!

    This is wonderful, the feeling of being alone on a crowded city bus comes to mind and this poem takes my breath away!

    • 5 years ago

      by D.

      Thank you Andrea :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    You captured an intimacy, even in meeting a stranger (I assumed this at least), and the ways we may become vulnerable to one another. How moments can be extraordinary, and if we're paying attention, reveal the humanity in each other. This felt like a scene from a movie where two characters linger, and share a moment or look that humbles them, or makes them feel seen/heard. The last four lines were so perfect that it made me shiver, because of the double meaning of "masked", literal and also emotionally, what we hide behind and never expose to others.

    Fantastic, Daniel!

    • 5 years ago

      by D.

      Thank you for your comment! I hope the two people in this were socially distanced :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Star

    This is really beautiful, you captured a scene so perfectly.
    I also love the double meaning of masked!!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Gracy Judith

    'A moment' captured so beautifully...
    Congratulations on the win!

    • 5 years ago

      by D.

      Thank you Star, Gracy. :) Hope you're both well

  • 5 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well done, Daniel. Is there a possible typo in 'as world'? I believe a 'the' would fit very snugly indeed between that lovely use of alliteration! :)

    All the best as ever, good man.

    • 5 years ago

      by D.

      You’re absolutely right! I dunno how I missed that. Thanks so much Ben. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Michael

    Daniel,
    Certainly a timeless moment, with a gentle structure. Great to read your poems again
    M :)

    • 5 years ago

      by D.

      Cheers Michael. Always a pleasure to hear from you. :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Oh this is beautifully lovely.