Comments : A Moment

  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Daniel- Hello!!

    This is wonderful, the feeling of being alone on a crowded city bus comes to mind and this poem takes my breath away!

    • 1 year ago

      by Daniel

      Thank you Andrea :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    You captured an intimacy, even in meeting a stranger (I assumed this at least), and the ways we may become vulnerable to one another. How moments can be extraordinary, and if we're paying attention, reveal the humanity in each other. This felt like a scene from a movie where two characters linger, and share a moment or look that humbles them, or makes them feel seen/heard. The last four lines were so perfect that it made me shiver, because of the double meaning of "masked", literal and also emotionally, what we hide behind and never expose to others.

    Fantastic, Daniel!

    • 1 year ago

      by Daniel

      Thank you for your comment! I hope the two people in this were socially distanced :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Star

    This is really beautiful, you captured a scene so perfectly.
    I also love the double meaning of masked!!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Gracy Judith

    'A moment' captured so beautifully...
    Congratulations on the win!

    • 1 year ago

      by Daniel

      Thank you Star, Gracy. :) Hope you're both well

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Well done, Daniel. Is there a possible typo in 'as world'? I believe a 'the' would fit very snugly indeed between that lovely use of alliteration! :)

    All the best as ever, good man.

    • 1 year ago

      by Daniel

      You’re absolutely right! I dunno how I missed that. Thanks so much Ben. :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Michael

    Daniel,
    Certainly a timeless moment, with a gentle structure. Great to read your poems again
    M :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Daniel

      Cheers Michael. Always a pleasure to hear from you. :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Skyfire

    Oh this is beautifully lovely.