Comments : Claustrophobic Smile (Acrostic)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Nice creative work here. Nice use of metaphors, too.

    Take care.

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Star

      Thank you so much!!!!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by hiraeth

    I really like this poem, the title and the use of acrostic to convey a secondary message 'thought is free'.

    I will say that 'emptying the tears that drowned her, while/embracing her own self.' made me stumble a bit, maybe say 'emptying the tears that drowned her all the while/embracing her own self' or something to that effect.

    Really like this piece, it's creative :)

    • 2 weeks ago

      by Star

      Oooh that makes sense!!
      Thank you ^_^