Comments : I'm mortal

  • 2 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    It's so nice to read a rhymed poem that flows this well.
    The idea of slipping off mortality like a coat, then traveling to an external heaven is alluring. If you don't mind though, I'll save that dream for a later date.

    A good write.

    Take care.

  • 2 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I can only echo what Michael says, certainly in regards to the rhyming flow. But then, I would say that!

    All the very best.

  • 2 months ago

    by Brenda

    Wow! Really like this a lot. It flows beautifully, just like water over pebbles..in a lush stream.

  • 1 month ago

    by Keira Pickard

    Beautiful and smooth. The similie of a coat for life is perfect... great poem!

  • 1 month ago

    by Star

    This has depth, its really beautiful, congrats Obscure ^_^

  • 1 month ago

    by cassie hughes

    Beautifully written. I love the idea of mortality as a coat we just slip off to travel to the next plane. Congrats on a very well deserved win.

  • 1 month ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I liked this then and I like it now. Well done.

  • 1 month ago

    by Obscure

    Thank you all so much for commenting!