Comments : A Phantom's Hallucination

  • 3 years ago

    by Skyfire

    Some amazing imagery here for such a short verse. Great job.

  • 3 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    The imagery and title are both excellent. I love how you've used the word ' phantom ' , as it gives the poem a chilling atmosphere. I love this :)

    • 3 years ago

      by Star

      Thank you Skyfire and Keira ^_^

  • 3 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Love the personification and imagery, especially in "memories wear black gowns". This is short but haunting. And I also like how you wrote "the bruises of the broken arms", adding to the mystery, not really specifying whose broken arms. "the drifters of the candlelight" made me think of those, mortal and immortal beings who wander, or those who are stuck, unable to move on. Or the phantoms of our own memories, reliving certain moments that we can't yet process.

    • 3 years ago

      by Star

      Thanks ^_^