Comments : Winter's chill (English sonnet - iambic tetrameter)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Keira Pickard

    This is so full of hope for spring that it's contagious! It's excellent, each line consisting of eight syllables - if my counting is anything to go by - and smooth rhyming.
    My favourite lines are:

    I wake and feel the winter's chill
    In bones that shake just like the trees

    The similie is superb here , and conjures up wonderful imagery.
    I enjoyed this from start until finish!

    • 1 week ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thank you for your lovely comment. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

  • 1 week ago

    by Jane Do-Re-Mi

    I loved the sense of hope that this poem gave me. I'm not sure if this was totally about nature or if the 'winter' referred to the long drawn out effects of covid but I'm hoping the spring will arrive soon followed by a very long, carefree summer.

    • 1 week ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thank you. You are right, this poem is more than a nature poem. Winter is the natural choice to reflect what is going on for us all.

  • 1 week ago

    by Meena Krish

    This is a lovely Sonnet which gives the reader faith that all will return after the cycle ends and life gets renewed.
    Its been some time since I wrote anything and this read gives me that spring to write!

    • 1 week ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      I'm so glad this has inspired you. It's been a hard year, so having that 'spring to write' will help you and others make it through.

  • 1 week ago

    by Star

    I can see how this poem is more than a nature one. Good to read a new sonnet by you!

    • 1 week ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks, Star. These sonnets certainly make a mind work.

  • 1 week ago

    by stormingdance (Jessica)

    Winter - a time of quiet introspection while waiting for spring.

    Lovely poem- nature poems are my fave!

  • 1 week ago

    by Emi

    Hi. Mr D, the title could mean many things, or could be purely the chill we all feel through winter or it could be something more maybe a person who is lonely and although they live alone, they fe the chill (loneliness) more in winter and I for one know how that feels. They say suicides always go up in winter time and it really doesn't surprise me.
    I wish I knew the answers to this, I often wonder why the clocks don't stop getting changed because atleast then we have abit more daylight, I suffer vitamin D deficiency (I think that's the correct one) so suffer more so during winter because of the lack of daylight. Time certainly does pass by so quickly doesn't it? I've realised a lot more how quickly, especially within lockdown just how quickly the time passes and day turns into night and it's pretty frightening.
    I love this stanza as it goes back to how quickly time is passing and shows none of us are getting any younger.. I for one feel like an oap at present because my bones are creaking and stiffening up, bloody arthritis lol I love the lone "in bones of wood like frozen trees" as it links nicely back to the title.
    I like the leap of faith here in her, who I'm assuming is mother nature that she'll make things better after winter, weather wise, returning to warmer days in spring making the flowers blooms and giving us 'warmer rain' once the winter snow has gone.
    I absolutely love this ending and it makes for a better future... No matter what, whether it be in the seasons changing etc, we always have something we should look forward to like in the pandemic I know it's been difficult for us all but we must realise that better days will come and we'll be able to see those we've missed so dearly.
    An astounding sonnet as ever Michael. Lots of love, Em x

    • 1 week ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Wow Em, thank you so much for this!
      Your analysis of my poem is like you taking a wander around my brain. Lol sorry it's so dark in there, I need to pop another fifty in the meter. :)
      Look out for me, I'll be flipping back the top of your head to wander through yours.
      Thanks x