Comments : Sooth me lull me but awake me

  • 1 month ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I read this when you posted and somehow I thought I had left a comment. Sorry!

    To me, this reads like a poem that was written straight to the page/screen, so to speak. I often do this too, especially in the draft section of PnQ. The poem itself induces a semi-hypnotic state. I'm not sure if this was your intent, or it was just your state of mind. The repetitive swaying is like a lullaby and then after a spell in the embrace of the ocean of tranquility, the 'fresh' and 'salty' process of waking up. Again, the repeating words 'awake me' like an acceptance of wanting to awake to see the new day, full of gentle rays.