Comments : Greatest Gift of all

  • 1 month ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    I do like the poem, it shows wisdom. The only off-putting thing is the formatting.

    take care.

  • 1 month ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    In my opinion, the formatting is far too distracting here. And while the spaced out choice could work for a word or two, having it spaced out in a full stanza, and throughout, takes the focus away from the content. I feel like, as the reader, I had to focus more on trying to separate everything properly.

    On to the poem, the rhyming was simple and kept the flow, and was very reassuring. The beauty of knowing people. Of knowing and understanding their pain, and also their joy. I think when we deeply care for someone, we can want to take on some of their burdens, especially in their darkest times, when they can't hold it on their own. I also read this as wanting that person to acknowledge all you can offer them, even if you've said it before. You want them to realize you'll be there for them to lean on, and you won't leave.

  • 1 month ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Much, much better.
    This is a well written rhyming poem. It is uplifting to read words of support for another in need. By helping others we help ourselves.

    Take care.