Comments : long lost hope (acrostic - writing prompt)

  • 1 month ago

    by Hellon

    This is quite dark but I liked the flow and word choice...especially 'nowt' I love this word!

    I see it was written from a prompt but, I never would have guessed if you hadn't revealed it.

    I always though Black was Black but...apparently not :)

  • 1 month ago

    by cassie hughes

    Wow! I love the language you use and way this flows it beautiful. Dark as the paint it depicts. A great match for the prompt.

  • 1 month ago

    by Brenda

    I like this a lot Michael! Dark, brooding...

  • 1 month ago

    by Star

    The is actually veryy well written. It’s so dark, it seems like a lot of thought went into it. :)

  • 1 month ago

    by Ah Satan 666

    @-@!!!

    Love this, so well penned.
    I've grown fond of Acrostic in the past, whilst getting my head around formed poetry.
    It can be challenging keeping the flow going, without it seeming just like stacked sentences but you did a great job here. Rhyming is smooth, not forced... You have to love a bit of mixed forms, it's like putting spice on your breakfast... Pops you eyes wide open @-@...lol.

    My favourite lines...

    "Muted bright was snuffed that night
    Under the sightless sky."...

    ^^ So, so sinister and dark... The image in my head was of a candle wick and smoke, the flame was... just GONE.

    "Can man still be a priest of song
    Knowing our hearts are dead and gone!?"

    ^^I adore dark writes that challenge faith, comes across so much darker, hopeless and final.

    Really, well penned :)
    In my favourites
    *****

  • 1 month ago

    by Ah Satan 666

    @-@!!!

    Double post... Told you I liked it :)