by Ben Pickard
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Lovely piece of free verse from you, Kitty. Some darn good imagery sprinkled liberally throughout. |
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Thanks so much Ben :-) x |
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So soothing to read, like inhaling and exhaling with the spirit of the wind. My favorite lines were "You speak through shapes in my hair / Your seasonal language billowing my coat behind me". I wasn't a big fan of the wording of "swirling sleety whirls" though, as it broke the flow a bit for me and read like a tongue twister, but perhaps that's what you were going for with the "s" and "w". |
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Thanks so much for your comments MA. I'm glad you enjoyed it, I don't think I write about nature enough! :-) x |
by Mr. Darcy
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"seasonal language billowing my coat behind me" |
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Thanks Mr D :-) x |
by Jack
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Nice! |
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Thanks Jack =^.^= |
by Paul H
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Well written, moving poem. |