Comments : Don't expect to be understood....

  • 3 months ago

    by Keira Pickard

    First of all, l love well written free verse, and this is exactly what l enjoy. There is such a delicate use of language and metaphors, and the descripition is superb.
    I think the title works really well with the context of the poem. And, although the context is very sad, l think it's just wonderful. Nicely lade out :)
    Just a couple of really small things:
    On the last stanza, in the third line, did you mean ' is thrown' instead of ' its thrown'?
    And lastly, the title needs one less dot, as an elipses consists of just three.
    Overall, this is absolutely fantastic:)

    • 3 months ago

      by Meena Krish

      Thank you for reading and commenting;

  • 3 months ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello. There's a lot of sadness and inner turmoil in this write. I do like the metaphoric imagery, it lends itself well to the overall feeling of disconnected hopelessness. One small typo, I think, 'walks' should be walk. However with the title, the typo could enhance the meaning.
    I enjoyed this. Thank you.