Comments : Day 27

  • 3 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    It's an odd thought. You've given me chills!
    I love the repetition in the lines, like the echoes around the desert. Actually, I don't think I've ever dreamt of being in a desert, or travelled to one - at least, not that I recall. I also like the spaces you've put between the sentences - inadvertently or otherwise, it adds to the empty atmosphere of a desert.
    I enjoyed the concept/context of the poem. I agree with how you didn't name it - it, again, adds to the endless desert atmosphere. And I like the fact that you didn't capitalize the ' i 's in the middle of sentences.
    Anyway, excellent :)

  • 3 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I like desserts too - personally something fruity, covered in chocolate and with a side of custard. Oh, no - you meant...
    sorry, i have such a food brain and a sweet tooth. I like the echo sound of my pudding bowl when it's empty, it says, 'i'm ready for seconds!'

    • 3 years ago

      by Everlasting

      Hahaha you got me with the pudding. I love vanilla pudding. Oh my goodness… pudding

      I’m drooling.