Comments : i think of spring far too often.

  • 2 years ago

    by Hellon

    I really like how you separated the starting line here. Was it a statement or an accusation? It leaves the reader wondering so encourages me to read on. In the end I thought it was neither, just a fact that you have accepted but still can't fully come to terms with.

    I thought you used 've too much through out (could've, would've) but perhaps I'm just more conservative in my grammar due to my age I guess lol!

    Is there a word missing in this part?

    but sometimes the best
    thing you could for yourself is just
    let things die –

    could do? ...not sure.

    Glad to see this nominated.

    • 2 years ago

      by prasanna

      You're right, a word is missing, good catch! You're right about the usage of contractions, lol. I was doing double NaPoWriMo (write a poem daily during April) poems, and this was written during NaPoWriMo. Most of these poems could definitely use more editing and a look over, thank you for your lovely comment!