A sequel! How brilliant! You have made the sonnet look deceptively easy here, when we all know they're anything but. I love this continuation of the story and can imagine them as a series of children's books with fun illustrations, both poems have all the right ingredients for it. I can't nominate it on a Sunday but I don't doubt I'll be beaten to it.
So well done Mr D! :-) x
Thanks for this. I will look over it and im sure change those areas.
The moon was rising, so the word 'rise' would fit nicely! As for the elephant, this was an area I hoped the reader would interpret. The 5 fell onto the seesaw, elephant one way and mice the other causing them to catapult up.
Luce, thanks for this. A big help! :)
4 months ago
by Ben Pickard
Excellent, Michael. These are turning into quite something. More, man, more. I would agree with Lucero, however: the "wanted" is definitely off there.
All the best as ever,