Comments : Resurrection (Haiku)

  • 2 months ago

    by Rayven

    Beautiful couldn't describe the words you have pained here. With the title my mind goes into the poem with reborn or rebirth.

    You set the scene well here with the first stanza, I can imagine standing by a river on a windy day surrounded by trees, so I get the feeling of being in a forest or woods of some kind. I also get the sense that it is spring time as well because I personally imagine spring being windy.

    I like you gave us a whole atmospheric imagery in the first two stanzas and they play off each other well. You went from wind to gray clouds which is a good mixture for rain. Which is something you went with here.

    The last stanza is perfect to wrap up the poem and to give the reader clear thoughts of peace. It is spring and earth and everything armour you is becoming in bloom again. This is where the title truly stands out as well.

    The one personal small nitpick I have is the commas at the end of the first two stanzas, as they interrupt the flow of the poem itself, but I wouldn't change anything else!

  • 2 months ago

    by William Mae

    A beautiful write, it is something to behold watching life being lived in nature, letting you witness the beautiful creation is special.

  • 2 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Beautiful imagery and inspired. I loved the image of wedded trees tangoing and also as the finale when green eyes awaken. Milly x