Also like the subject matter of this poem. Like how you characterized the person in the beginning, the light that you painted them in. Similar suggestion as the previous poem, a change in punctuation can make a huge difference in how it’s read. Try periods at the end of sentences or semi-colons or something to sort of break the poem apart slightly. “But than” should be “then” I believe and the following line could be “asking” rather than “asks.” Putting in those little punches drives home emotion, which there’s a lot of in this. “But then…” or “Letting you just walk away. / Feeling my heart get colder.” I also tend to google synonyms for words I feel that I’ve used a lot in a poem, try to find more variety when I can’t find the word by myself.