hi um your poem was beautiful and so true..i mean i know how u feel, and sometimes it gets so dark you dont kno were to turn at but if u need some help or just need to talk to someone who knows how ya feel please email me at frenchy_08729@yahoo.com
Jamie

Hey, that was a bit dreary, but hell, so are some of mine. I hope things get better, kiddo.

Another great poem Remember you can tell me anything . . . Its been good talking to you Keep writing

Love, Taylor

I really like this poem! you use your words so effectivly!! well done hun,
as always, hugs and love,
Lmay xXx

wow that was so cool.......that was really symbolic and very strong!!! great work! check summa mine...they suck but meh.......check em anyway!!!!

Hey, I like it. Good use of words. Keep it up. Thanks for the comment. Take care.

~no more

Not physically
But mentally

this line is not well suited in this poem
Though it expresses the meaning but it adds a stop to the rhythm and secondly dont use so much i's in the poem. The reader loses interest when you got in deep describing just yourself . Mix it up with third person

Rest everything wa good
4/5

take care,
you can improve I belive:-)

Roxiee