Comments : Eve of My Life

  • 19 years ago

    by KeEzY

    I LOVED IT IT`S REALLY GOOD! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK

  • 19 years ago

    by Abbie

    I love the way you've written this poem, i don't think i've come across it before, but it works really well! hope to read more of your poems soon!

  • 19 years ago

    by FireCracker

    Gr8 job on this one hun, i loved it , it was so well written, AWESOME WORK AND WAY TO GO .. ! lol .. check out my new works .. lol I miss hearin from ya and I love ya to death ! .. !
    May
    =D

  • 19 years ago

    by Shy

    i like it 4/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Carmen

    that one was good, but i think 'Adam's Rib' was better. still great though!

  • wow, i didn't know anyone could make the story of adam and eve this intresting
    excellent piece of work
    xox

  • 19 years ago

    by Bredada

    how sweet i love it!

  • 19 years ago

    by xxangelchicxx2000

    bueatiful poem. keep it up

  • 19 years ago

    by Sean

    I loved the poem, slight critique (If you do not mind it from somebody who is rather naff at poetry) is that the last line of the first stanzas repition of Ice chops up the flow a bit,

    good work.

  • 19 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    grate poem i loved it well done.

    Jacs
    xxx

  • 19 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    Extremely fluid and eloquent style, loved it.

  • 18 years ago

    by Renee

    Excellent poem. I'm not one to be religious, but I must say, this poem has soo much truth in it. Great job on incorporating two concepts that contradict themselves.

    Take Care,
    Renee

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    We were tired of getting ice, while others got the cream

    that was my favorite line

    i do like the message of this poem as once again im not religious but i still got it so good job

  • 18 years ago

    by Jacklyn

    Ok so i saw you said this was your favorite poem and that you have it memorized, and i such at memorization so i decided to come check it out!

    beautiful poem! i love it!

    "I felt warm as she gave to me the illusion of affection
    She felt safe as I gave to her the illusion of protection" those lines were awesome to show that people do things for different reasons, they just really stuck out to me! a job very well done!

    ~Jacklyn

  • 18 years ago

    by Amanda

    Awww it's great as always! I couldn't ever write a piece like that - i hope i'm as good a writer as you one day!

  • 18 years ago

    by cLumsy

    I can't believe all of your poems are 4.9... sigh... don't they round up here??????!!!! haha, anyways, i'm straying off topic. this is a beautiful piece. keep writing! ;D

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost Soul 691

    Just discovering your poems ... and I like what I've been reading. :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Again, A really great poem. I liked the rhyme scheme you used in this one. You pulled it off pretty good. It was great!! 5/5

    `Taleee.

  • 18 years ago

    by loretta Taylor

    Very nice, love the flow . its a very meaningful poem

  • 17 years ago

    by Driver

    Wow, this has to be one of the best ive ever read... the flow of the sentences and the structure seem perfect...
    Driver