I really liked this, Robert! I write similar poem/stories, and I thought this was very unique. One question though, with the last line: "for i will never see life again or bare a man's seed". Is the person telling the story a woman? With the other part about being the most beautiful one, I think it is. Please let me know.
I like the idea. It's about countess bathory, right? The flow was very forced, I think it would have done better as a non-rhyming poem. The balance was off and there were a few grammatical errors but other than that it was ok.
The imagery here just blew me away! The story you told had me captivated from your first line to your last. Very good choice of words to express your meaning making it an interesting poem to read and I enjoyed it.