Comments : Goodbye

  • 17 years ago

    by *K~L~C*

    that was such a good poem but i agree with sara that it was heartbreaking! keep writing

  • 17 years ago

    by TAinted vįŕťues

    theres nothing i can say that'll do justice to this poem truly AWESOME...and heartbreaking

  • 17 years ago

    by Dani Ward

    this poem is so sad, but beautifully written

  • 17 years ago

    by Mephastophilis

    wow. the end was very chilling. i love it and i don't know why the ratings so low. anyways i'm giving it a 5. xmollyxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    That is terrible. Well i mean it is a good poem, but sexism, particularly from a parent, is a bad thing. Okay:
    "I’m thinking about thinking
    I’m dreaming about dreaming too"
    and
    "Wishes are like my hope
    And hope has never been there"
    those lines kick major butt.
    "I’d like to see
    If you could be
    If you could try
    To be me
    With all this said
    I wish I was dead"
    that stanza was okay, but the lines were a bit too short for me to like the repetitive rhymes...however
    "I cant be
    Let me be
    I can’t think
    I can’t dream
    I wish I could be myself"
    i liked a lot because the myself at the end changed the whole thing from rhyming in a strange way to not rhyming at all, but sounding cool. Good poem!

  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    oh sorry for commenting twice, but in that last stanza I cited, the first "cant" needs an apostrophe

  • 17 years ago

    by Not Bulletproof

    whoa that was awesome..the rhymes were awesome and it flowed fantastically..it was just so sad! espesh. the last verse..<333
    -Mortalidaga
    xxTakeCarexx
    Smile..<3

  • 17 years ago

    by Cristy F

    wow great poem read it several times! added to my favorites

  • 14 years ago

    by honeypot

    Great poem, sad subject but so powerful and some families actually think this way.

    Some really inspiring thoughts in there, and nice style of writing and rythym- welldone x

  • 14 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Oh my gosh...this is sad and definately heartbreaking...

    the flow was great..nothing wrong with this one.5/5 nice work. keep it up!