THATS COOL
it made me laugh
and at the same time ti's still got all seriousness about it
all your stuff is really good - or the stuff i've read so far

check out some of my stuff and please comment if you get time

-lyd :D

cool poem very different

the first thing that caught my eye was this line..

I asked them if they were joke

ther should be an "A" between were and joke..or else it does not make much sense...

in this line:

Hoping he would be human cut me some slack

there hsould be an "and" between human and cut...

I just loved this part:

I saw the nice Jag that stated Bob Car on the plate,
And I put two in his tale pipe to seal its fate.

that was awesome to read...made me feel like going out and blowing somoens car up...nice poem, few mistakes, and the sylables were a tad off on a couple of lines, but interesting concept.

I like this one. I thnk the ending is a little unrealistic, but makes for good reading. I do like stories that are about life. Adult type life, the kind people face more of. One without innocence and childish stares.

This is great...but...typical...I still gave it a 5 though...

interesting, different and it definitly stands out

And again another great poem! i like the story behind it well done! keep writing!

This is nice great work.

Well written, excellent word choioce, deep emtion well penned 5/5