She got up into her feet
is thi supposed to be 'onto'?
She knew the man who drove just drank
this really should be revised, it interupts the flow when trying to understand the sentance.
This is something she'd never vision
this isn't a correct sentance, (though I know why, I do it too sometimes, I'm just picking things out,:)) but I think it would sound better if you changed 'vision' to 'invision'. It's still not grammatically correct, but poetry can do that.
very interesting poem indeed, and the emotion is there. Keep up the good work! 4/5.

I like this peice, there a re a few gramatical errors, but they dont matter as much as the actual content in my opinion, and it is really very good

Nice poem
well written...
sad..
i like sad poems
i liked this one too...
hope u write more...
good luck & thanks for commenting on my poem

if u can check out murder or suicide i'll return the favour... pls vote & comment
love
amy