Interesting, nice writing!

CHARLENE @

You have a way with words, and making description seem so beautiful. I loved it.

hello omg, as Jackie from the Steven S Queer Eye episode would say: "LLLLLLLLLLLLLOVE IT!"

You have a characteristic way of writing that is for sure. The dimensions of your writing is precisely on target. They Drip with enthusiasm and seem to have a great deal of calculation into each word. The apprehension you paint in your poems is perfect. I can see the Scene in my mind though i am not there.

Five>>>

lovely poem!

I love this. I love that you took a commonly heard thing and wrote it in such an in depth and horrific way that one might think was capable for such a subject.
You really portray the abandonement of innocense and development of evil desire throughout the piece, and therefor the diminishement of true care and love for the person.
Excellent job, beautiful words and spectacular metaphors/imagery, lovely.

Great poem. I do think that you can work with the structure a little to make for easier reading. Keep it up.
~*~Christina~*~